Is Stating the Obvious Over?
I think that depends.
When pitching to the media, it’s most important that the first few sentences of a pitch don’t make the audience zone out. Or worse, press delete.
There are PR professionals who argue meaningless throwaway phrases like “for immediate release” and “media advisory” are redundant. Potentially boring; causing a journalist’s eyes to glaze over.
I recently read an email pitch that lead with: “Thanks in advance for taking the time to read this request.” And I immediately thought I was in for a bore. For a start, it didn’t compel me much to continue reading. Dullsville! A classic example of an attention span killer.
In public relations it is still relevant to state if a release is under embargo or if the pitch is exclusive. These are important determiners to point out to media early on in a pitch.
The story that got me thinking about ‘what to say’ and ‘what not to say’ in a pitch and/or advisory is here: http://www.ragan.com/Main/Articles/81f8c716-bb0f-484b-ae0b-3b779b506df3.aspx The comments section is the best; readers debating it out!
Takeaways:
- If you start to hit the snooze button on your own work in the first few lines, then don’t expect it to be an eye-opener with anyone else.
- Stating the obvious is often essential, but don’t let boring verbiage slow the reader down.


